Saturday 5 May 2012

Debut



debut in scarlet and silken cream heeled
when as a girl hair ringlets ribboned sealed

dreams of adventure worlds travelling far
dipping mighty oceans beyond the bar

paths rapidly shaped and forging converged
keeping further back what life had emerged

but each time she closed her eyes butterflies
tears that fashioned waterfalls crystal lined

swaying ears of golden corn within reach
journeyed fields, mountains, sandy pebbled beach

resolute firmly stood poised becoming
high waves rose to push her back sulleying

visibly rocked, shaken holds still a grip
on life she craves and thirsts to take a sip

-  Clarion Sonnet -<

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  1. very nicely done to form....nice tension in the end as well witht eh waves knocking her back as she seeks to sip life...it def adds emotion....enchanting verse tonight...

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  2. I read this a few times. The first part of the poem seems to rush just as time does when one is young - a thousand things done in a day--- and then with a jar one turns a corner, hits a wall, has a child and everything changes. Loved your Clarion sonnet - Well done!

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    1. I'm so pleased Gay, that really means a lot - thankyou for your most welcome encouragement and inspiration :) x x Lib

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  3. Lovely poem, Lib...love the form..so hard not to rush about..life is to be savoured :)

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    1. thanks Louise, yes it is difficult sometimes with so much to do and fit in, often so little time. Hugs Lib x x

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  4. A beautiful write, Lib. I love the end !

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    1. thanks Ayala really pleased you enjoyed x x Lib

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  5. O, this is so enchanting Lib. Tasting life...savoring it like a fine wine. Your visuals here are magical, and use of language so delicate yet strong. Love this poem!

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    1. Oh that's so lovely to hear Jacquie :)) your words of encouragment - so very pleased - thankyou for your read and also for patiently searching and finding it :) x x hugs Lib

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  6. Nice poetry form ~ I appreciate the details like butterfly tears ~

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    1. thankyou so much for your kind words - hugs Lib

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  7. tight form, with a mystic touch

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    1. thankyou Ollie much appreciated :) Lib x

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  8. Really nice flow and some very beautiful images.

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    1. thankyou so much for your kind read - Lib

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  9. the images you use make this a very intense read, esp. the last part with the waves and she, trying to sip life...well done lib

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    1. thanks Claudia :) really appreciate that x hope your trip went well - hugs Lib

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