Crowned with flowers his own sweet gentle dove,
on satined shoes, pease blossom peach in rosied hue.
Tresured with such a care and showered with love,
she in oystered cream frilled in powdered blue.
Gently, hands accepts his favor from satined glove
where petticoats swirled gossamer flaired in pas de deux.
From chance first meeting on the bridge by the green,
little knowing was conspired by others now unseen.
(c) Libithina 30/5/2011
Form Ottava Rima (abababcc) from @Onestoppoetry. Thankyou Gay.
In dedication to those romantics now passed, Alec, Joyce, Edward and to commemorate special anniversaries ~ Silver, Pearl, Ruby, Gold, Diamond
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This is just so naive, beautiful in its own kind. I am amazed. Lovely!
ReplyDeleteYou paint a beautiful and romantic picture here. I love the imagery and you realized the rhyme scheme perfectly weaving your words with care, colour and tone. Your syllable count is off in the second, fifth and sixth lines. I am thinking you may have purposely used some anapests, but I need to hear you read it or see your scan. However at any count lines two and six are still too long. It's up to you if you want to edit further. It's beautiful as it stands. Thanks, Gay
ReplyDeleteI just love the lushness of each line, the fragrance and texture of the flowers, the flounce of fabrics. Gorgeous.
ReplyDeleteLush romance
ReplyDeleteRomantic and lovely...it transports us to another time...
ReplyDeleteAs an Ottava Rima for this specific week's entry, a few things were off. However as it is such a beautifully romantic write I can hardly say change it.
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